The obligatory critique post!

Here's the place to tell me if I'm failing, "doing it wrong", or even passing with a decent grade. I'd love to see how I'm doing! I don't want to ruin one of my favourite characters, so I'd really like some advice!

I'd love it if you could suggest some things I could do to improve. Thank you. ;//; I'm trying hard, so I'll do my best!

Feel free to post normally or anonymously. Be as harsh as you'd like; anything's welcome!

[Slight shuffling can be heard as a head of silver hair rises and reaches for the glasses atop the nearby nightstand. As the glasses are put on, their owner realizes that this hair is longer than it was the day before. One confused Yukito rises from his, er, her bed with a very confused expression. Look down. Pause. Look up.]

Um.... if I'm right, this may be a little awkward.

[ooc; Sorry, Yuki! You're just too fun to pass up.]

I've never really made a Christmas list before! I usually get birthday presents instead of Christmas presents, and I would feel bad if I asked for both. N-Not that I'm asking for presents or anything....!

-A new lunch box
-A new pair of chopsticks
-Lots of food!
-To know how everyone is at home
-To spend more time with To-ya
-To better understand my other self
-A cookbook?
-To get to know Clow-san better
-Um.... lots of sweets!
-Good present ideas for To-ya
-To become more in touch with my feelings

[ooc: He's completely unaware that this list is up! He knows he wrote the first part, but he has no idea that the list is up as well. Deepest desires? Just about~]

This is the second day.

[ooc: BECAUSE I NEEDED TO POST WITH YUE. Feel free to stalk Yukito's post (it's in this journal as well). Both are completely up for grabs~! Go wild!]

There are so many new faces here today! I wonder what the occasion is?

[ooc: 4TH WALLING IS GO. Ask him anything! Post anything! Go crazy!]

I suppose it's better to just talk about insecurities, right?

Though it's been a while, I still feel bad for taking To-ya's magic. Sakura-chan felt like it was her fault, no less. I can tell she understands now, but.... I'm still a little worried about To-ya. He's been acting strange lately. I wonder what it is?

Also, I know I shouldn't worry about such things, but my past has always bothered me. I used to lose my memories at times because I was becoming someone else. I'm not human, and just a host for my other self. I can't help but feel slightly meaningless at times. I'm my own person and I'm here for a reason, but.... it's a little uncomfortable having realized that all of the memories from my childhood are lies. I was never a child, though my false memories still remain. I probably won't even age like everyone else. What will happen when they grow older and I'll never be able to? I'm sure others will begin to realize it eventually. Maybe Clow-san could answer some of my questions? I don't know when would be an appropriate time to ask.

Still, I have to smile. Everything from the time I met To-ya and everyone else.... those memories are real, and that's what matters the most.

....Huh? Why won't the filter work? I never was very good at this.... ah! I can't erase it either? That can't be good....

[ooc: He's being truthful despite the lies of others. I don't know if he's affected or unaffected since I'm slightly confused on the rules of this curse. I'm stupid. orz]

It seems as if everyone's been falling ill lately. I wonder what it could be? The symptoms seem to vary from person to person, though it seems like the flu. I hope everyone's alright. I would go visit some of you if I wasn't sick myself.

So sleepy.... This almost reminds me of before.

Halloween seems to be celebrated here far more than at home. I'm used to seeing parades and lighting candles that float in small paper boats, but I have seen people in costume in more recent years. It's mainly an American holiday, if I'm not mistaken....?

I'd really like to try carving a pumpkin. It sounds quite fun, to be honest! I've never had this sort of experience before.

I'll need a costume in order to fit in, right? I wonder which costume I should make?

Like everyone else, it seems I have a letter stamped on my hand. Is this a curse? It's not so bad.

I hope this goes away at midnight. I suppose it would be a little startling for people to see a bright red H on my hand every day.

[ooc; H is for homo, guys~ It's a pretty hurtful word to be called in Japan, though homosexuality itself is generally accepted there; that is, more than it is in America and most other countries. Though Touya and Yuki themselves don't say it out loud (not even to each other), it's obvious that they're in a relationship. They don't even need to say it to each other. There's just a mutual understanding between them. Look, even their H's are matching!]

The moon is so bright this evening, and the skies are incredibly clear. It would be a perfect night to visit the ponds and go moon watching. Would anyone like to accompany me?

It reminds me of that time about three years ago.... it would be nice if there was a festival tonight. I miss seeing everyone's smiles.

[a faint crackling is audible before the voice of a (slightly out of breath) boy can be heard]

Does anyone know where the new pastry shop in town is? I was told it was near the aquarium, but I haven't been able to find it anywhere. Guess I won't make it before closing, huh?

Um.... is anyone here?  Now that I think about it, this doesn't really look much like Tomoeda anymore....

[ooc: Have a lost Yukito! He's fresh from home, neatly packaged and delivered to a city near you!]